Posted by BFlowers at 2006-03-27 12:31:39 Voted 1.00 on 03/27/06
I couldn't make it all the way to the end, sorry. This was really, really, really bad. It's not in any way a good idea for a module. The characters are two-dimensional, and I think I'm being generous with that comment. The plot is laughable. Really, giant robots and power rings?!?!?! Honestly, I'd be hard-pressed to come up with anything good about this entry.
In addition, it fails to meet the contest reuirements in any way. There is no player character. There are WAY more than 4 characters. It's well under in word count. And when you consider how much words were used in descriptions rather than dialog, it's no wonder the dialog comes off as a little thin. There is no choice, non-linearity or multiple endings.
In short, I'm sorry, but it is a failure as a module-writing-contest entry.
Posted by MikeLM9215 at 2006-03-10 22:46:34 Voted 4.00 on 03/10/06
Was actually surprised how easily I read it. Does violate the modern language and medieval setting rules.
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Posted by thegeorge at 2006-02-09 14:03:16 Voted 1.25 on 02/09/06
My understanding is that documents could be sumbitted instead of modules, at an obvious disadvantage. However, like Criispin said, this story is awful in many ways.
Posted by teabiscuit at 2006-02-07 15:05:54 Voted 1.00 on 02/07/06
This looks more like a high school creative writing assignment than a module (or even a plan for a module) to me. Accordingly, I give it a "C" and a reminder that "decimate" does not mean what you seem to think it means.
Posted by nukem at 2006-02-06 20:46:00 Voted 1.00 on 02/06/06
No mod available for download. I'd give it a zero if I could. The Rating should be 0.00.
Posted by Criispin at 2006-02-04 11:27:16 Voted 1.00 on 02/04/06
Your opening sentence needs to have a comma removed. You switch scenes before the reader can get a feel for characters or settings. This is not the kind of story where setting and scene descriptions are needed, so no worries, but your dialogue is ridiculous and insincere. Your story is a heavy handed moralistic jab at people who are not black and white in real life. This obviously very young author needs to experience life and meet people before he allows himself to cast judgment.
Plus it was boring.
Posted by Anonymous ( 70.114.xxx.xxx ) at 2006-01-31 22:47:13
Ummmm....this is not a Neverwinter Nights Mod.
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