This single player quest was written for the Bioware writer's competition.
When King Agisaleus came to the throne, he made a declaration. Any of his subjects may come to him once in their lifetime to make a petition and be fairly judged . Now your daughter lies dying from an unknown disease. In desperation you have travelled to the capital to beg the audience of King Agisaleus. Here you hope to convince the king to send his healer to your daughter in an attempt to save her.
14th Feb - corrected 4 missing his/her tokens. No changes to mod.
Module List by this author (in reverse order of completion):
Wyvern Crown of Cormyr
Tales of the Sundering: Prelude
The Prophecy
The Wanderer II (CEP)
The Wanderer (CEP)
Level Up Module
The Wanderer II
The Wanderer
Birthright of the North
Birthright of the North (non Expansion version)
I liked this story idea. But I have to agree with some of the other players. It seems like a larger scope than could be dealt with in this contest. I say this to you as a person who knows from my own failed experiment. Two of my modules which I entered into this contest dealt with large scale subject matter (one of them very large) and seemed to have failed me. I fault myself in that while I maintain that my idea was very good, and even my execution of that idea was good, the fact remains that the contest is too small for the story. I found that you had a very similar situation here. I like your idea, I even like your execution, but it just does not come across as believable to me. If you had more room to work in I feel you could have really done a good job here.
Posted by Mister_Leebo at on02/25/06
There are elements of the story that seemed to fall apart for me. In general, everyone's reaction to the prophecy didn't seem too natural to me but I realized the king was just bloody stupid with fear. I suppose I didn't find him very King-y. Hector, on the other hand, was a fine character. Each of the endings deserved a little more description about the results of your actions. Especially choosing the King or the Oracle. Most had a single line or a few lines that described the immediate events but in the overall picture I don't see the King becoming the "Greatest King Ever" after most of the endings so I'm left wondering how the prophecy gets completed in those instances. The actual writing was quite good. This is a writing contest and most of my complaints are story-related. This module was good, I could see something like it appearing in a game.
Posted by Ryuujin at on02/16/06
I was impressed with the setup, the scene and setting was perfect for the job, and the characters showed believable traits - the self absorbed king, the loyal and giving right hand. There was a bit too much theeing and thouing in the by the Oracle, thee's and thou's were never used that extensivly, even in old English (In fact, Old upper class English was more colloquial, than modern upper class English). But anyway that's a small point, the plot, the concept, and the realisation came together nicely, and I love these morality based plot scenarios that test a players thinking and resolve. So, top marks, cut down to 9.5 because dialogue in a writing contest is very important, and the Oracle's theeing and thouing did grind on me, but it was a minor flaw in otherwise perfect module and easily correctable in practice (ie. don't do it again ;p). On a side note, my primary/first choice was to kill the king :)
Posted by Gimlet at on02/16/06
I?ll be honest, thought this was a regular mod right until I found it so short! Shows how often I visit the vault. Anyway, I really enjoyed it, and now I?ve read the rules for this contest, I?m even more impressed. I?m going to download some other contest mods now?
Posted by MikeLM9215 at on02/15/06
All roads lead to the oracle. Makes the endings feel flat. Execution and death in combat without the oracle appearing would have made me like it better. Why isn't Hector made king if you kill the king? He would make a much better king. His reign I could see as being glorious, the guy on the thrown I want to push into a pit of lava. Talk about cowards! _________________________ The road to Ravenloft is paved with good intentions.
Posted by WormysQueue at on02/15/06
This module has a nice touch of greek tragedy; no matter what you choose, in the end there's suffering. I don't like those ends too much, but that's a matter of taste, so I won't hold it against the module.
Posted by BenWH at 2006-02-1409:22:05
I have updated the module to include 4 missing his/her tokens (3 referring only to males, 1 referring only to females) because this sort of thing can cause offence - apologies if it did. If you find any more please let me know. In case it matters to you, I have not changed any of the writing, as I prefer to stick to the orginal guidelines as laid down, and leave the writing unchanged from the original submission. This is a personal choice, not a criticism of others! _________________________ Works of B G P Hughes: Link AME Chairman
Posted by Kirian at on02/13/06
This module is well written and the story unfolds in a way such that the player is drawn into it right from the start. The author managed to give the module a less linear feel than many of its competitors, for which I commend him. However, the story had a few weaknesses: for example, it wasn't clear why someone had to die at all - it did not follow from the propheshy; so why? Also, I was annoyed by the fact that my female character kept being addressed as 'he' and 'this man'.
Posted by happyfish at on02/13/06
Echos Lance.
Posted by Berra at on02/11/06
Very good plot with different choices/endings. I liked the moral questions in that you just cannot please or save everyone. Sometimes you have to choose. Well done! _________________________ /// Berra (Hall of Fame, Reviewer's Award and Golden Dragon Winner): Berra's Module Collection (All of Berra's NWN1 works) Interviews: NWN-PODCAST INTERVIEW GOLDEN DRAGON AWARD INTERVIEW. Reviewer's Award and Golden Dragon Award for: Surviving Horror 2. Other Downloads: NWN1 - Berra's Module Favorites, NWN2 - Berra's Module Favorites. Homepages: Berra's NWN Blog Berra's YouTube Channel (Features original horror movies). CONTACT ME HERE. Everyone: your VOTES are highly appriciated. A vote is like gold for an author. No kiddin'. ;)
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